JoyK
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| 11/23/2007 3:08 PM |
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I redid this zebra I posted a while back, trying to get more color in the stripes. I had even more, but it seemed to look like a children's book illustration. I know I am my own worst critic, but I feel like my work looks too juvenile. Any help is appreciated. I am trying to pay more attention to light and values. |
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klippie
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| 11/25/2007 8:59 AM |
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Nice work,
I would add some Paynes grey in the stripes partly,
to give more contrasts and next time leave more whites.
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sandeep.khedkar
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| 11/26/2007 5:14 AM |
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Hi Joy
The zebra has come out quite well. What seems to be distracting is its mane. I do remember that you had posted the actual foto as well and there it was the way as you have captured. But in the painting, it seems to be standing out...(please forgive the pun...its not intended  ) Unfortunately I do not have a solution for that, apart from doing another version of the zebra.
As Retha has mentioned, some contrasts would definitely help to bring out the values better. You could try using a tinge pf Prussian Blue along with Burnt Sienna (wet in wet) to get darker shades that would go with this scheme.
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JoyK
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| 11/26/2007 10:48 AM |
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| As always, your help is appreciated. I can't seem to get the mane to look natural. The colors are brighter and the left side of the face is much more in shadow in person - it looks washed out on the screen. I was even concerned that the left neck and face looked too dark. I think I am "fiddling" with everything too much. I had more white between the stripes, but it didn't look natural to me. I'll have to learn to leave more whites. |
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sandeep.khedkar
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| 11/26/2007 11:59 PM |
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Hi Joy
I think its only the mane that does not seem to be right. Did you get another picture of a zebra and see how the mane looksthere? Perhaps that would help. Otherwise the painting has come out very well. The warm tinge to the stripes gives a good impression of sunrise / sunset. To get a different painting, you could try zooming out and add more surroundings to the zebra, may be add another one for company...I think you have got a good grip on the zebra as such...then why not use it in many ways using various compositions...I do it many times...use the same theme in multiple ways to see the changes. Its a very good exercise to study how composition and varying color combinations affect the paintings.
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JoyK
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| 11/27/2007 9:57 AM |
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| I agree about the mane; I should try to get better source material. It seemed to look like that on the photo, as far as height, but softer, so I may try to soften the edges. I'm trying to take a photo and made some changes; to someday be an artist, not just a copyist. I have a hard time interpreting a subject and want to try to get looser and more expressive. Thanks for you help!! |
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wingman
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| 12/01/2007 12:42 PM |
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| I think your zebra is quite handsome. Don't beat yourself up. |
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clarity
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| 12/02/2007 2:32 AM |
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| Hi - I think it's lovely. The only suggestion I can think of is to make the mane and the line down the throat not as regular. More individual and irregular perhaps. Good luck. |
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onebarkingdog
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| 12/05/2007 6:21 PM |
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| I really love your zebra- the ears, mane, neck and forehead are all fabulous - I love the values and shading- and i think the stripes are excellant. If it's any help, the anatomy of the face seems a bit off, to me- unless it's a baby zebra. The muzzle seems small to me and the lines around the nostrils and the left eye are bit sharp- perhaps lending to the illustrative quality you mentioned. It feels like maybe you were intimidated by the face and were trying to be very careful. I hope that's not too persumptuous a statement? I'd love to see the broad, blending strokes you have in the detail of the ears on the face. I think overal it's an exciting, inspiring piece! :0) I love it! |
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JoyK
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| 12/06/2007 12:46 PM |
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All of your help and encouragement is greatly appreciated. Here is a (I hope!) final version, where I added some darks to the shadow side of the nose and stripes. I tend to get very discouraged with myself and feel that I am not progressing well. It seems as if when I try to "loosen up" it just looks like a bunch of blobs.  Thanks again!!! |
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sandeep.khedkar
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| 12/07/2007 12:59 AM |
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Hi Joy
This has come out very well. I would not touch it any further.
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klippie
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| 12/07/2007 1:24 PM |
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thats very nice... like your improved version.
Good work.
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