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Maggie429
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| 11/03/2008 1:41 PM |
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| Phil - this is very dramatic and emotional. I do like it. The background is very dark, thus is it hard to see what issues you were talking about. The only thing I would note is a bit more light on the bench where she is sitting. You have light on her but not too much on the bench itself. Otherwise, it is well done. |
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Priti
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| 11/03/2008 7:18 PM |
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| What a timely title. Nice work, how big is the painting/ |
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Nancie
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| 11/03/2008 7:35 PM |
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This is an interesting painting. It makes me think, I like that. What is she thinking about? Why is she so sad, so lost in thought. The dark colors around her add to the atmosphere. Very nicely done.
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Kassie
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| 11/03/2008 10:02 PM |
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Phil,
This is a very engrossing painting. I agree with Maggie a little light on the bench would hold the figure in the painting. However I do find the face/head is a bit too large for the figure. I have the same problem when I'm trying to get the right expression on the face. But the face itself is well done.
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bjohnson
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| 11/04/2008 9:21 AM |
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| Hi Phil,
I hope that this is not presumptuous but I did take a few of the suggestions that other posters made and incorporated them into a temporary image of your painting to see if they "played" well. I brought up the reds in the mid-ground, I brought a little light to the bench, and I added a few "spots" of lights to draw interest to the face. Obviously this is taking a great deal of license with the intended "mood" of the painting so please feel free to reject it wholesale. If there are any other tweaks that you'd like me to try - let me know, it only takes a few seconds.
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eyecandy
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| 11/04/2008 9:24 AM |
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| I guess that the photo came through a little darker than the original. The bench is actually lighter than it shows in the photo. I have actually measured the head size carefully against the body and it is correct for this ladies proportions, I think. Maybe I made her face too wide. I'm not sure, but I can't get this model back to verify. I do thank you for your comment, however.
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Snowartist
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| 11/04/2008 11:47 AM |
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You did such a nice job! It is too bad that the model is so depressed. But I think you captured that look very well.
I am amazed that you could paint the background from memory!
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eyecandy
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| 11/08/2008 2:19 PM |
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| I did paint the background from memeory, but I wouldn't make any bets on the accuracy of scene. I simply improvised where I wasn't sure, and I did have a problem with the prospective of the bench which I am still working on. I do think that I'm going to have to fine a park and look more closely at park benches. |
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torie
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| 11/24/2008 5:37 PM |
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| Phil I think your painting is very good. The third picture down is the one I feel looks the best. I think whats bothering you on the park bench is you need a space between the back and the seat of it with a rod are a bar connecting the seat to the back of the bench. |
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jAlida
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| 11/28/2008 10:17 AM |
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| Lovely colors, and great job with your model. I would try to tilt back the rear edge of the bench seat in the foreground just a bit so she doesn't look like she might slide off if she relaxed. The rear edge should be a tiny bit lower then the front, or at least sugest such with shading. Yes, a structural gap would work, but some benches don't have one. Love the wild flowers you put in the gass around her. The cheery setting is a good contrast to her expression, which makes for a picture we all want to pause and contemplate. |
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VirgilStreet
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| 12/27/2008 5:09 PM |
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You might try making the part of the bench she is sitting on brighter, because it is flat and facing the sky. Then the part that is upright is darker. With all the bench the same value, the viewer can't tell what part of is flat and what part is upright. Then she will look like she's sitting on something flat and your perspective problem will almost be solved.
I like your first take best - the dark background gives a good contrast to her fair skin and white dress. Watch your edges, she's looking a little glued-on. |
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