mikec@pols
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| 10/10/2008 7:38 AM |
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Hi Maggie,
To me, the top line of the trees following the shore line just doesn't look right. I think if you correct that it would help a lot. Also, and I know that you've fussed with this already, the colors that are farther away should be cooler than the colors close to you. That will help with depth also. If you look at the water, it almost looks as though it's on top of the paper....it doesn't look 'set in' to me. Do you have a reference phto? This is a great piece and I think just a little tweaking will help it a lot. I know how frustrating it is to keep fussing with a piece and sometimes ya just gotta say enough. So, if you're at that point then just leave it alone and be happy cause it is a nice piece!
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Maggie429
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| 10/10/2008 10:18 AM |
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Hi Mike - I do not give up that easy so any help is great! And you've been super for putting up with me. Unfortunately there is no reference photo so I'm on my own which is hard for one who cannot do landscapes well. I am trying to understand about the trees - so they are even on top? This is like a crash course in landscapes! haha. Or... do you mean the bottom of the trees following the shoreline. I think I just got that!!
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Bpier
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| 10/10/2008 7:52 PM |
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Hi Maggie. I really like what you've done so far. I've found that the best way to adress depth is to lose the detail and the contrast. The further away, the least contrast. I usually take the trees that are the furthest and paint them almost a washed out, very light gray. Then the tree in front would be a little more defined the closer they get. Don't know if this helps.
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jAlida
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| 10/11/2008 6:51 PM |
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Hello, again. Wow! This is what you call painting by committee.
Motion. My husband still wants a suggestion of motion with the motorcyle. Try a touch of dust kicking up from the rear tire.
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Kassie
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| 10/11/2008 10:52 PM |
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Maggie,
This is looking good to me. In art there is always one more thing you can do. The thing is are you satisfied.
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Priti
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| 10/11/2008 11:14 PM |
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| Wow, Maggie beautiful work loved seeing this one progress, the way you have painted the biker is my favorite part of the painting. the trees look much better also. |
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Maggie429
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| 10/17/2008 7:17 AM |
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Would you believe Mud River is now back to Mud Lake! Who would have guessed! I have been scrapping off paint, applying paint, redoing trees, riverbanks, water.... I think I'm about two more sittings away... thanks to you all, I didn't give up! Not sure if the front bank on the right hand side needs something? Any suggestions... always welcome. Thank you thank you thank you.
 Maggie
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Priti
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| 10/17/2008 7:53 AM |
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| Maggie, this has come along very well. From a high key painting it went to a more balanced one. You are a very good artist and thanks for sharing this "step by step", it helped me learn a bit also. |
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Theriot
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| 10/17/2008 8:45 PM |
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Wow Maggie,
I haven,t been on this forum for a few weeks and I'm amazed at the journey this painting has taken.
I really like the treeline on this last version. But what happen to the nice small trees in front? I liked those too.
Overall, great improvements Maggie. |
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mikec@pols
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| 10/18/2008 7:12 AM |
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This looks really, really nice, Maggie! I'm sorry I haven't got back to you on your questions to me....been busy.
The only thing I see right now is the dark water above the grass in the foreground. To me, it makes the water look like it's 'above' the grass instead od behind it. Maybe lighten the water a bit?
Nice work! I respect your perserverance and patience in this one.
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jAlida
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| 10/19/2008 9:44 PM |
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| Wow! I really like what you have done to the trees on the other side of the lake. Nice work. I agree with MikeC, though. In comparing the sky and water colors, you can easily lighten the lake water some, especially in the foreground. That might make it look more realistic. Speaking of which, the reflections of the trees on the far shore are lovely. Also, your shadows on and around the biker are great. |
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tami
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| 10/22/2008 10:50 AM |
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Thanks for posting your progress here. It's been a learning experience for me. What an improvement! The trees in the background are great. I think you are finished. If I would add any critique at all it would be to add something to the bottom right corner...like darken the shadows, more like in the second picture you posted. |
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Maggie429
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| 10/23/2008 7:47 AM |
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Well, it's finished. This sure has been a challenge, 1 - because of the landscape (which I'm not very good at) and 2 - it is the largest painting I have done (36 x 24). Thank you for all your suggestions. I have actually learned alot, from being able to scrap my oils off and reworking areas to working with dept (still have alot to learn)!
One question - how long do you wait until you can put a varnish coat over the painting?
Unfortunately the pictures do not do the colours of the painting justice as I am inside an apartment and not using a flash due to reflections. But, nevertheless, just think of this as a much brighter painting! Take care. Magi |
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